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ILLUSION - mystic thriller

Harry is a player who a large card-table debt hangs on. To get money from him, his girl is taken in hostages. In search of output, Harry gets in a casino «Illusion», where carried out all his wishes, and for one night he becomes the proprietor of the enormous state. Here is only one prohibition – all, what he owns inwardly, outside grows into ashes. And am only 24 hours on that, to pay off with a debt.



LIFE WITHOUT PAIN - drama

Jenny has a rare disease is not feels physical pain, but as heavy as lead experiences stranger pain. Alex is indifferent to the stranger sufferings, but is terrible afraid of physical pain. They become the casual victims of maniac who dies from a cardiac attack in the height of the acute tortures. Remained only to rid of shackles and get out from the deep locked basement.

RECKLESS WATERS – mystic

A day came, when water was filled with anger. Each, who drinks this water, falls in reckless anger and obsessed a desire to kill all flesh, what meets him on a way. Life around grows into a bloody butchery. But there is a prophet, who knows where the unique spring was saved, and he conducts there not many survivors, but a way on the edge of earth is very long, and a man waterless lives only three days.

BEAUTY WILL RESCUE THE WORLD – drama

Young terrorist, who must blow up a carriage in a subway, a few instants prior to the act of terrorism meets a beautiful girl. Falling in love at first blush, he can not assume her death. But to betray the matter of his clan he does not can to. He moves aside the moment of choice with all forces, but he must do it. What stronger - hatred or beauty, love or fear of death?[/QUOTE]

Жанна-
1)Нужно перевести все это с британского английского на американский...
и исправить ошибки...
2)Это не логлайны,а краткое описание(по моему)
3).Иллюзия--- казино,деньги превращающие ся в пепел и девушка в заложниках -всего лишь какой-то компонент истории..(история должна быть более глубокой)---опять таки,это мое личное мнение .Я его не навязываю.
4)Жизнь без боли -никого в Голливуде не заинтересует.Там сотни тысяч подобных
5)Злобная вода-опять компонент какой-то более глубокой истории
6)Террорист-наивно

Мой совет- переделайте Иллюзию ,а лучше всего смешайте ее с Водой.....;)
Еще раз повторюсь ,я ничего особенно не понимаю в сценаристике,так только ,использую интуицию. Здесь на форуме есть профессионалы-пусть они посоветуют...
В Голливуде выживают только лучшие из лучших ! Или дети Спилбергов!